Great tension, and I again loved that you flashed to Nicole in advance of revealing this side of the story, I found myself still picturing her there in the bed as you described her even while I was reading this, it all feels very connected, which I expect is one of those things that is much harder to do than it appears to be. I think I speak for…[Read more]

This is great and telling and real and there ARE those moments that they both momentarily slip out of “character” and acknowledge the vulnerability that undoubtedly would exist for both of them in this moment. I really enjoyed imagining myself ravaging and fucking Rachel as if I were him…it would be an incredibly heady moment!!!
-James

Holy hell. I had to stop reading and walk away after I read the words, ‘feed me your pussy’ omg, that was fantastic and just the right turn of just .. Umph, pure debauchery. I swear I was going to call it a night right there and just go jerk off but then I had to come back and keep reading. So hot, so, so hot. Alex is… well. I don’t know…[Read more]

I have the most devilish grin on my face right now after having read this…

I definitely like Alex’s style!
Whether that is having her walk around with her dress fully open under that coat, or constantly requiring Rachel to confirm/re-confirm her readiness/willingness/desire to taking the next step (also known as making her all but beg to be a…[Read more]

I hope it energized your day accordingly!

i found myself reading faster as the elevator moved along…bravo.

I felt my cock getting harder and harder and starting to pulse and twitch and jerk faster and faster as the elevator moved along…

I couldn’t decide if she was going to just rip the dress open when she couldn’t get the buttons undone or not…
I was getting more excited to see just what he would have her do once it was fully undone and they had rea…[Read more]

Didn’t realize you are reading the story, and delighted you found something you like. Let me know if you got up and spoke with designer girl (and what number was she?).

Mr BrankSpank, first I want to respond to your comment about the layout of the site and story. Given your preference, if you have an interest, you should read the story here, unencumbered by the “comments” http://www.thesexexperiment.com/groups/erotic-collaborations/forum/topic/untitled-for-now/
I am going to ask @him to read your comment…[Read more]

Thank you for the great feedback and I am enjoying your parallel flirtation with young designer girl.

First move by Alex with the coat, super smooth, I love that! I am going to use that! and Rachel’s response is exactly what I’d be thinking 🙂

In the elevator when he looks up, he’s checking where the video camera is right?

This is super hot, You definitely have us feeling ‘it’, so much so, here again I wanted even more (and that is rare for…[Read more]

I am soooo loving everything about this…not the least of which is the masochistic tendency of Nicole to not only face the situation head on, but to literally pick up on the most sensitive possible aspects and rub her own face in them…

I literally I imagine Nicole being tied to the bed face up while Alex is fucking Rachel in a way where his coc…[Read more]

Switching back to just this perspective at just this time was brilliant. You have us really on the edge of the seat hungry for what’s going on… Asking many of the same questions as Nicole at the same moment, perfect device.

I like you giving us enough to really start picturing Nicole like this, I like thinking about her naked, clinching, aching there. I think about what everyone of those actions and thoughts feels like when I’ve done them myself and then superimposing thoughts of Nicole’s body over the top. I could have stayed with this even longer. I wonder…[Read more]

Omg… Why didn’t he tell her?!?! I would have been bursting to tell M. He would be so turned on, that was an incredible accomplishment! How can he stand not to tell her?

Ah yes torment and lust, wanting and pleasure, freedom and belonging… NOW we are into it! But they have chosen this path, set themselves on it in no small manner… The deeper questions, motivations, desires will begin playing out now… in one way or another (I would argue by him managing what he shares in this way, it has already begun). So…[Read more]

Yep, I know that feeling… it is a miracle she didn’t crash the car! This is getting me all jumbled thinking about wanting cock and pussy so much at the same time.

Stupidity is better than injury!

I swear I’m not making this up, and I did not do it on purpose, but I rear ended a guy in a Porsche once and he was gorgeous and we did end up dating… Oh and the car was fine, but I was quite late for my class 🙂

The one thing I have learned is there someone out there doing anything and everything!

I did crash a car once driving home from swing (the dance – NOT what you were thinking) camp. I hadn’t seen him(#5) for more than a week and I just kept going faster and faster… The anxiousness and just boiled out of control. I actually couldn’t believe…[Read more]

Omg, it was soooo fun too! There is no way you couldn’t do it if you decided to. Belly dancing is harder than many of the others!

But I doubt I made you blush… yet.

You are a charmer, Luis. Maybe you should be the one to seduce Rachel. I am soliciting ideas. So, how would you do it? Or what do you want to read next?

Holy hell…

Yep, that is definitely working for me. I love the way you are flipping from each point of view and making every step an incredibly inventive erotic experience in and off itself.

I’d have to say steam not sauna cause things are certainly hot and wet over here!

I don’t want to give my ideas, because what you come up with is always better than what I am imagining! And the surprises and twists always floor me! But I’ll ramble for a bit and maybe you can take something from it.

I am totally into the progression of the story, but also very interested in understanding more of the motivations, desires,…[Read more]

My long overdue comments are quite simple. Well played…on many levels, from the awkwardness, to the directness of Alex in asking Rachel to “perform” certain acts for him which he knew (or strongly suspected) would have an immediate and undenyable affect on her arousal…to the start/stop full throttle/full brake abruptness that is a hallmark of the…[Read more]